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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this a positive or negative development?

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The globalization of industry and commerce has such an impact on modern life that different counties are becoming more and more similar. That can be reflected by the fact that people buy the same products anywhere in the world. Yet, there remains some controversy as to whether such a phenomenon is positive or negative. Personally, I believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Several reasons are listed below.

First and foremost, the ability of purchasing what the customers want is the symbol of raising the living standard. It is the human nature to possess something valuable. If the products are really popular with customers domestic and abroad, they are definitely high-quality and well-functioned. Only those who are struggling with poverty will choose those inferior commodity. So, purchasing the high-quality products, despite the similarity, can improve the customers feeling of wellbeing.

Furthermore, the world-wide circulation of the products doubtlessly has a positive influence on the national income. That is the reason why most countries want to explore the overseas markets and sell their products abroad. Also, the globalized commerce promote the culture transmission, thereby increasing mutual understanding among different countries.

Those opponents may argue that the globalization will has a negative impact on the local manufacture industry or economy. For those developing countries, products from advanced nations always pose a severe threat to their local industry since those developed countries are often equipped with much capital and superior technology. However, we should not give up eating for the experience of choked.

In summary, I believe that the globalization of commerce is an irreversible trend. Although some negative effect can be spotted, the overall positive impact should not be neglected. (278)


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神様棉花  谢谢 分享我也在写这篇作文 不知道从何下手 希望能从中参考意见  详情 回复 发表于 2015-10-26 11:57
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DylanWei  好好审题,分论点准确,论证基本到位,6+还是有希望的,别气馁撒。  详情 回复 发表于 2015-9-9 09:51
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看来最多也就6分的命了

好好审题,分论点准确,论证基本到位,6+还是有希望的,别气馁撒。

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繁忙的老虎  嗯~~谢谢老师的及时修改和建议,真的很受用!  详情 回复 发表于 2015-9-9 11:43
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DylanWei 发表于 2015-9-9 09:51
好好审题,分论点准确,论证基本到位,6+还是有希望的,别气馁撒。

嗯~~谢谢老师的及时修改和建议,真的很受用!
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