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MISSION

Some people believe that unpaid community service shouldbe a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working forcharity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children).

To what extend do you agree or disagree?

ESSAY

In recent years, the arrangement of courses in highschool play a significant role as the boost of education system. At themeantime, whether the middle school students must attend to some socialactivities remains a source of constant debate. From my point of view, it is necessaryfor that students to join in appropriate community events.

Firstly, it is no doubt that those students who usuallyparticipant in community activities tend to be a charitable people when theygrow up. Once they gain the responsibility of society, they would benefit thecommunities throughout their lives. So, as the main stream people, they havemore possibilities to make enormous contributions to improvement of society.

Furthermore, students are likely to acquire the social knowledgeand skills which they could not be taught in school. For instance, during thestudents devote themselves to solving problems between neighborhoods, theywould learn some thinking methods and communication skills to solve normalconflicts. In that way, students would acquire some social skills when theygraduate as adults.

However, it is also true that for some students, attendingto community activities has some negative impact on academic knowledge learning.Indeed, social events spend their time which can used to enlarge knowledge. Butunfortunately, the pros are far greater.

In conclusion, participating in community activitiescould improve the consciousness of charity and social skills which they have tolearn. Meanwhile, we ought not to ignore the shortages of too many compulsorycourses. Only by doing so can we guarantee our communities to have a promising future.

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