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Governments should spend money on railwaysrather than roads.
To what extent do you agree or disagreewith this statement?

Nowadays, an increasing number of peopleare concerned about the construction of public transportation. Some state thatgovernment should invest more money on railways. From my personal perspective,I partially disagree with it.
There are several reasons why I am indisagreement with this view. First, compared with other type of public transportation,railways such as traditional trains and subways, may not be so convenient andcomfortable as others. This is obvious because there is often a long distancefrom the railway station to our house. It would be worse if you do not live inan urban area. Second, trains might not be the best choice in transport ofgoods, especially bigger ones, such as huge containers and cars. Advocates ofinvesting more on railways might ignore the contribution of othertransportation and he or she would feel differently if his or her booked car willbe arrived in half a year just because of the poor condition of the roads.
However, that is not say that railways constructionshould be neglected. As we know, subway may be the most fashionable publictransportation due to its huge contribution to environment. Therefore, it isgovernment’s responsibility to invest such public transportation and increasethe public’s awareness of protecting environment. Moreover, trains might be themost punctual vehicle in our daily life. Traffic jam, to some extent, arebecoming one of the most serious problem among the most developed cities allover the world, causing plenty of problems to our society such as anxiety, airpollution, which could be relieved by subways remarkably.
In conclusion, governments should stand ata high level to decide the investment on public transportation to boost our efficiencyof trip. Thus, roads, ocean and railways should all be put good emphasis on.

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发表于 2016-4-19 11:48 |显示全部楼层
希望老师尽快批改
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发表于 2016-4-19 12:10 |显示全部楼层
SATapp下载
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发表于 2016-4-19 12:19 |显示全部楼层

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发表于 2016-4-19 12:40 |显示全部楼层
谢谢这位同学分享,老师批改辛苦了
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发表于 2016-4-19 18:16 |显示全部楼层
想看批改的版本····
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发表于 2016-4-27 10:38 |显示全部楼层
看看,老师批改。。。。。。。。
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发表于 2016-4-27 11:52 |显示全部楼层
前来学习学习。。。
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发表于 2016-4-28 10:09 |显示全部楼层
想看批改,学习一下,自己也谢了一篇不知道水平如何,不知哪位老师可以帮忙批改下,跪谢
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发表于 2016-6-3 15:05 |显示全部楼层
很想看一下老师批改的原文,
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