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[Jessica.Zhang老师已改] 【TPO47】模考写作,【5月7日要考了】,求老师批改!

 
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【TPO47】
【综合写作】
According to the reading passage, we get the idea that pterosaurs were not able to have a powered fight. However, the professor disagrees with what the reading claims by giving three reasons.

First, the reading passage suggests that the pterosaurs were probably cold-blooded and had a slow metabolism, which cannot produce a lot of energy for a powered fight. On the contrary, the professor argues in the lecture that pterosaurs had dense hair like covering, which was found on the bodies of warm-blooded animals to maintain their high body temperature. So the pterosaurs are more like warm-blooded animals, which can provide their powered fight.

Second, the author holds the opinion that the pterosaurs were so heavy that they cannot have the capability to flap their wings fast enough to stay aloft for any length of time. In contrast, the professor contends that from the recent knowledge, we know that the pterosaurs had unususal weight because they had hollows which can help them lose weight. Besides, they also had low flying wings to help them fly.

Finally, the reading claims that the pterosaurs were not able to take off form the gound because of their small and weak back legs muscule. However, the professor denies this opinion and asserts that the pterosaurs are very different from birds. Birds use their back legs help them take off. Whereas the pterosaurs used four limbs to push off from the ground. In this way, there were no trouble for them to jump high enough to take off.

【独立写作】

【Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.】

The events happening around the world such as international news can  provide an opportunity for people to acquire knowledge and understand foreign culture. Some people have the idea that it is very significant for people to know what happens in the world, even if it will not affect their daily life. As for me, I totally agree with this idea. The reasons supporting my argument will be analyzed as follows.

First, knowing what happens around the world can help people to broaden their horizon, hence acquiring more knowledge. That is to say, the people who pays more attention on events happening around the world will have more knowledge about the foreign culture and tradintion. For example, my sister likes reading the International news from Internet. At the time she was asked to write a composition, she can use the events she received from the International news to further illustrate her argument, which helped her get a high mark. Moreover, the idea form the people in one place is so limited, people should know more about the events happening in other places. Because people will have different opinions to the same kind of things, which can help people to improve their critical thinking abilities. Consequently, knowing about events happing around the world will bring more information to people.

Moreover,it is benefit to the people, especially the students who will study overseas, to have a deep understand of the foreign culture before they really go abroad. In other words, it can help people to adapt to foreign environment better, since the culture from their own countury is very different from the foreign countries. Furthermore, more and more students choose to study overseas, it is so important for them to adapt themselves in the International situation. In conclusion, to know about events happening around the world is a kind of perparetion for overseas students, which will help them lead a better life in the foreign countries.

Admittedly, knowing what happens in the world will not affect people's daily life, while knowing what happens around people's life can help people to lead a better and more convinent life. However, knowing the International events can help people understand this world better, hence broadening their horizon. Besides, as to the overseas students, it is a kind of preparetion for them before they really go abroad.

In conclusion, according to the above reasons, we can safely draw the conclusion that it is important to know about what happens around the world.

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啊啊啊啊没有老师批改吗~~~~~~~~只批改独立作文也行啊,独立作文的题目我已经贴出来了呢~~~~~~麻烦一定要看一眼呀~~~~~
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