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TPO32 在题目是Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past
It's undeniable that the world we live in is developing at a staggering rate , some people assert that people are less happy or less satisfied about their lives nowadays than those who live in the past
owing to the changing wold, nonetheless, from my own prospective, the rapidly changing world doesn't not necessarily result in less satisfactory about our own lives, but may breed a more harmonious world for it benefits us both physically and psychologically.


Firstly, the developing world facilitates us in our daily life and generate more useful tools, for example, the facilities which the digit revolution in the past 30 years bring to us surpass the inconvenience it cause, like the giant technological companies, such as Google or Facebook, which has masses of data or information about you or the whole world, help you when you were confused about some information or knowledge or can bring you happiness or enjoyment through making new friends via Facebook, which definitely improve your social interaction or wellness and broaden your horizon about the whole world, also it can bring you entertainment and surely the things above will not cast you problems.


Moreover, the rapidly changing world is in consistent with the improvement of medical education development and healthcare facilities in hospitals, which ensure us with more medical assurance and make fatal diseases curable. For example, in the past, there were many lethal diseases happened periodically such as pestilence, which account for millions of lives in the Medieval Europe. However, with the development of modern science and improvement of medicine, many horrible diseases aren't fatal anymore, and the mortality of pestilence decreases, which will surely result in a population growth and more satisfactory about lives.


Admittedly, the high-paced world sometimes may breed some minor problems such as we just concentrate on moving forward but forget to enjoy scene in our road, or we have to work diligently to keep pace with this developing world without enjoy our lives, we have to concede this rapidly changing world sometimes inevitably cause us some problems, however, its pros still outweigh its cons. Despite we may lose the chances to enjoy the beauteous parts in our lives periodically we own many  more possibilities to live a life that follow your own heart, sometimes this new type of life maybe totally different from your precedents, also it offers you more access to the more entertainment tools such as the various of apps in smartphones or the amusement parks all over the world, so maybe we live in the very best of era and enjoy the azure sky and the progressing modern science, with all these developments and progress, we can always envision a brighter future.


In sum, when to come to the choice whether people satisfied their lives more now or in the past, i tend to put my faith in the present due to the enhancement of the living standards and improvement of the medical treatment, etc, which will surely make us more satisfied about our world.


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It's undeniable that the world we live in is developing at a staggering rate , some people assert that people are less happy or less satisfied about their lives nowadays than those who live in the past owing to the changing wold, nonetheless, from my own prospective, the rapidly changing world doesn't not necessarily result in less satisfactory about our own lives, but may breed a more harmonious world for it benefits us both physically and psychologically.



重新发一次,第一次好像排版不是很好,这样老师看起来应该会轻松一点,希望得到老师的批改


Firstly, the developing world facilitates us in our daily life and generate more useful tools, for example, the facilities which the digit revolution in the past 30 years bring to us surpass the inconvenience it cause, like the giant technological companies, such as Google or Facebook, which has masses of data or information about you or the whole world, help you when you were confused about some information or knowledge or can bring you happiness or enjoyment through making new friends via Facebook, which definitely improve your social interaction or wellness and broaden your horizon about the whole world, also it can bring you entertainment and surely the things above will not cast you problems.



Moreover, the rapidly changing world is in consistent with the improvement of medical education development and healthcare facilities in hospitals, which ensure us with more medical assurance and make fatal diseases curable. For example, in the past, there were many lethal diseases happened periodically such as pestilence, which account for millions of lives in the Medieval Europe. However, with the development of modern science and improvement of medicine, many horrible diseases aren't fatal anymore, and the mortality of pestilence decreases, which will surely result in a population growth and more satisfactory about lives.



Admittedly, the high-paced world sometimes may breed some minor problems such as we just concentrate on moving forward but forget to enjoy scene in our road, or we have to work diligently to keep pace with this developing world without enjoy our lives, we have to concede this rapidly changing world sometimes inevitably cause us some problems, however, its pros still outweigh its cons. Despite we may lose the chances to enjoy the beauteous parts in our lives periodically we own many  more possibilities to live a life that follow your own heart, sometimes this new type of life maybe totally different from your precedents, also it offers you more access to the more entertainment tools such as the various of apps in smartphones or the amusement parks all over the world, so maybe we live in the very best of era and enjoy the azure sky and the progressing modern science, with all these developments and progress, we can always envision a brighter future.


In sum, when to come to the choice whether people satisfied their lives more now or in the past, i tend to put my faith in the present due to the enhancement of the living standards and improvement of the medical treatment, etc, which will surely make us more satisfied about our world.
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天,谢谢谢谢啦,我还忘记吧题目打出来了,还有排版也不好,我正准备修改
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hdfgbkbkljas  谢谢老师的批改  详情 回复 发表于 2016-5-8 17:02
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