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Some people say that the best way to improve public health is byincreasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that thiswould have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.


Increasing the number of sports facilities is regarded as the bestway to improve people’s health sometimes. However, I doubt it.
Some people are strong advocates of more sports facilities becausethat could offer individuals more opportunities to exercise, which is ofbenefit to health. Adequate equipment could motivate people to spend more timeon exercise, which could consume extra calorie and prevent from obesity. Withoutit, citizens do not have easy access to participate in sports activities.
However, there are concerns that the increasing number of sportsequipment may have little impact on health, and other measures need to betaken. For one thing, more sports facilities do not directly link to thehealthy bodies. Because people who are not aware of the significance of sportsare always reluctant to spend time and energy on exercise. For another, otherfactors also lead to the issues of health, such as unhealthy life style andtremendous pressure in workplace. Changing the lifestyle of adults andimproving their ability to handle stress are more effective.
As far as I am concerned, the increasing number of sports facilitiescannot completely solve healthy problems. The first priority is to develop theawareness of the public. Firstly, people who are conscious of the importance ofhealth tend to create opportunities to do sports(这样对吗 不知道“锻炼”还有什么替换词),despite of insufficient sports equipment. Secondly, people who are willing tokeep fit are less likely to do things that are detrimental their health(不知道健康还有什么替换词).For example, they would prefer fresh fruits and nutritious diets rather thanfast food, which would lead to obesity and heart attacks.
Overall, though more sports facilities make a positive role in thehealth of the public, I regard increasing the awareness of health as the bestmethod.

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