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[Jessica.Zhang老师已改] 求老师批改-剑桥雅思11-TEST1-大作文-比较铁路和公路的投资

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It has been argued thatgovernment should spend money on railways rather than roads. I will exhibit myreasons of supporting investments on railways as follows.
Firstly, Roads serve for short distancetransportations like in the local or between two adjacent cities, and the roadssystem has been over-developed. For instance, from last decade, it is so commonthat we travel by roads, because most of the families have already had privatecars. We seldom hear the media reporting that some new roads are underconstruction. This means the system of roads have been enough to satisfy thetransporting needs; on the other hand, over-development of the roads havegreatly influence the local ecological environment, not mention the airquality. It has made a lot of earth become the roads territories. The self-digestiveway of transportation pattern and even living style just show how introvert aplace character can be, which, are what people do not like to have in thefuture.
Secondly, railways are related with long distancetravelling, sometimes it can be used to cross among cities. On using railwaysmore, on one aspect, people could travel more among cities and far-away places,which stimulate the vitality of all those places, changing the old pattern ofself-digest to a new kind of opening attitude; on the other aspect, it isenvironmental friendly to travel by train, because it is a very efficientpublic transportation method with much lower energy consumption. Travelers couldenjoy the view during the travelling and make friends, etc.
To sum up, traveling to other places is a good wayto promote the local vitality, that is where railway could show its power, andwhile roads are over-developed, it is much better to choose railways in aim ofprotecting local environment also.

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发表于 2017-5-14 10:09 |显示全部楼层
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发表于 2017-5-14 10:24 |显示全部楼层
感谢您的参与,小站写作王牌老师JessicaZhang为您作出如下点评:
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感谢老师的认真批改!!非常耐心细致,谢谢!
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