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Question:<p>Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?</p><p>In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.</p><p>Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.</p>The maturation of a society allows its citizen to have better access to education, technology, and jobs. Young people now have more opportunities and possibility to make their own decisions. For examples, choosing a major in college, or choose which job to take. However, in the past, young people were often restricted to make their own decisions, but to conform to their elders. This was maily due to financial limitations and social restrictions.

Thriving economy provide the basis for contemporary youngsters to assert their decisions. For they\\\'re no longer have restrained access to education because of free public education by the government. In contrast, education was often limited to the elite families, and only parents can decide which kid can go to school. Due to the limitation of education, youngsters are unaware of their right to make decisions. However, the pervasion of education nowadays provides young people the mind and intelligence to make more informed and right decisions.

Secondly, the access to books and internet can replenish the necessary information needed for making an decision. Youngsters can search on the internet or consult thier books to find out which is the right path to choose. By comparing different choices, young people can be more confident about the decision they make, which eliminate the necessity for parents to make decisions for them. They\\\'re exploring and mastering their life by themselves, and are becoming more independent individuals.

Furthermore, the abundance of choices can make the decision process much easier for the youngster. As more choices are opened to them, they don\\\'t need to rely on their parents to find the only possible path for them. Searching for a job is a perfect example, in the past, the positions of jobs are limited because of insufficient job divisions, the types of jobs are limited


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老师那个斜杠系统错误 不是我的错
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求批改啊 xie'xei'l谢谢老师
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老师求批改啊啊啊啊啊啊
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