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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.Write about the following topic:Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.Write at least 250 words.


Economy play an important role both in the past and nowadays; however, could government only  pursuit the economy progresses and depite of other progresses to develope a country is worth to debate. In my opinion, government shouldn't pursuit econmic process only, the environmental process and moral process should also be concerned for a country's future.
Anyway, environmental process is the fundamental element to improve the quality of life in a country. If the nature environment of a country is pleasant and suitable for people to live there, it will attract more young people to settle down and provide more labour force in a country's market. It will derectly accelerate the economic progress. In the opposite, the ruined and contaminate environment will show a adverse impact on developement of a country and also slow down the economic progress. For example, in the industrial evolution period, the UK has experience a photochemical smog pollution due to the burning of a kind of fossil fuel named " coal". Although they are the first country to gain power from burning fossil fuel advanced than other countries at that period, they also undergone a huge artificial desaster. The government had to shut down some factories to diminish the emmission of some toxic gas, such as SO2, CO, NO2, into the air. Numberous of workers lost their jobs and need to find a new job instead.
Besides, moral process is also considered as an important part for a country when persuit economic progress. This process is aim to cultivate people the awareness of follow the laws and policies of government. By enhance the cost of against law to cultivate the awareness of follow the law and improving the benefits of following the law, people will be cultivate an awareness of follow the rules of government. This will make everything in the society in order and make the country more stable.
Overall, only pursuit economic progress has less benefit for the developement of a country. Combining with environemntal and moral progress can lead to a pleasant and stable society in a country.  



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