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发表于 2017-12-31 21:58 |显示全部楼层
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Task2:
In many parts of world, children have more freedom than they used to have. Is this a positive or negative development?




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In recent years, children are becoming more independent than before. This is because that they have more freedom to make own decisions, control their own money and also face to problems. As far as I am concerned, the phenomenon will bring us many undesirable consequences if too much freedom is given to children.


Having more freedom for their own lives, the youth will learn a lot from experiencing problems. They will possibly encounter troubles in spending money, arranging timetables and selecting own lovers, while these used to be controlled by their parents. After going through various difficulties themselves, they will understand how to make good decisions, which is also beneficial for their lives in adulthood.


However, many young people, indeed, have no idea about how to allocate their time and money if they can totally control these resources. This is due to that most adolescents are not mature enough to arrange their lives. They are more likely to abandon themselves; thus, they may become useless members to our society. Therefore, too much freedom will, in turn, make matters worse. And proper guidance is very improtant for them to avoid such problems.


Additionally, the adolescents are easily misled by their freedom to harmful things. For example, they can easily access to many films and TV series inundated with violence. They may probably imitate the inappropriate behaviour and even crime means from these massive media because most of them cannot judge right from wrong. Thus, the problem of juvenile delinquency is becoming more seriously. It is obvious that too much freedom for children to get access to these things will lead to unfavorable outcomes.


In conclusion, giving children freedom will make them experience more in their young ages. But too much freedom will definitely bring them a range of problems like abandoning themselves and being misled by violent media. Thus, it will be better to give them proper freedom under the guidance of their parents and teachers.

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