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    Drew by considerably frequent cases about declining public health, a great deal of attention is paid by all citizens nowdays to physical condition of the worldwide population, under which circumstance a solution- to install more sports facilities- is propounded, bringing about a heated discussion. Some people side with it, while others don't, claiming that more action must be taken. For my part, I am definitely one of the latter kind of people. Here are the reasons.
    First of all, the best way to popularize a lifestyle involving sufficient workouts is making its significance a universal knowledge instead of building more sports facilities. Generally, there are enough equipments in most cities, followed by another fact that some sports don't even rely on them, such as running. These facts reveal that it's not the lack of facilities that prevent people from doing sports, but people's unawareness of how important doing sports is. So, instead of building more equipment, the authorities should raise people's recognition of the significance of doing workouts.
    What's more? Excessive devices will make it much more troublesome to maintain them in a good state. Nevertheless, unsafe equipments may have some underlying dreadful danger, to lead to a tragedy if not immediately checked and repaired, which may further lower some people's will to exercise.
    To sum up, the government should not waste money on unnecessary construction of more sports facilities, but raise people's awareness of the importance of doing sports and make sure that the quality of extant equipments won't disappoint the general public.



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