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题目如图,正文如下:
    The following two maps reveal how the development of tourism has changed an island.
    From the first map, we could see a desolate island, which was approximately 250 meters in width, surrounded by the sea, with nothing on it but some trees.
    By looking at the second graph, nevertheless, we could find that great changes have taken place. For instance, at the center of the island stands a new reception, from which some footpaths and vehicle tracks start, connecting it with a restaurant, two groups of accommodation situated on both the western and eastern sides of the reception, and a pier in the south of the island, where some sailboats berth. What's more? Some recreational facilities also appear. For instance, at the northwestern corner of the island lies an planned area for swimming near the beach.
    Overall, there is no doubt that the construction has converted a previously deserted island into a developed resort with a great deal of tourist facilities.

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发表于 2018-1-8 14:43 |显示全部楼层
这篇文章以前被批改过,我修改了一下,麻烦哪位老师再改一次。我的目标分是6.5-7分,希望老师能提出相关建议,谢谢!!!
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