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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.


Shown are two maps of Islip town centre at present and in the future. A huge development can be found in these two maps.

It can be seen in the first map that the structure of Islip town centre now is reletively simple. The main road across the whole centre from the west to the east. On both sides are some shops. The northern side is countryside, while the southern side is housing area with a school at the end of the path in the southwest corner and a park in the southeast corner.

In the future map, the main road is planned to redesign as a dual carriageway around all buildings. The pedestrains from the west to the east separates the whole area into two parts. Bus station, shopping centre, car park and a new housing are in the northern area in a line replacing the whole northern shops. The southern shops, school and park will still be at the original position, though the area of park will be reduced. Some new housing will be built at the position of former housing area.

In conclusion, the major development will be concentrated on main road and norther area of it.


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思考太多会头痛  Thanks for the evaluation and advice. I'll take the advice and get improved on my task.  详情 回复 发表于 2018-2-18 11:04
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