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Task 1
The charts below show the ages structure of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and make prediction for 2050.

While the largest proportion of Yemen's populations in 0-14-year-old children and teenagers, it is predicted that 15-59-year-old youngsters and adults will be the biggest part in 2050. The five decades will not only see the increase of elderly citizens who are over 60 years old, labours who are between 15 and 59 years old as well, but also the dramatic decrease of the young that are below 15 years old.

Unlike Yemen, Italy has larger proportion of 15-19-year-old people which will keep as  the largest part in 2050 though it declined from 61.6% to 46.2%. However, similar to Yemen, the 0-14-year-old population will drop down and the over 60-year-old population will climb up. Unfortunately, with the dramatic increase of elderly dwellers which will be up tp 42.3% of the total population, Italy will step into aging society structures in 2050.

To sum up, with different population structures in ages, Italy may be confronted with more risks than Yemen as it is in the process of aging society.


Task2
Opinions are divided when discussing whether increasing the quantity of sports facilities is the best way to improve public health or other measures are also required. In my viewpoint, providing more sports facilities will certainly benefit to public health but other measures should be taken into account as well.

The reason why I strongly believe that constructing more sports facilities for the public can do good to their health is that we citizens have easier access to these sports facilities. If it was hard to find a swimming pool, few people would spend lots of time, energy and money in swimming to enhance their physical conditions. For example, there are many sports facilities in my school, including tennis courts, football pitches and so on, so students are willing to have 10-minutes walk to use them and improve their fitness.

However, on no account can we ignore the importantce of other measures that can help to improve public health. Firstly, schools should provide health curriculum for students and raise their awareness of healthy lifestyle. Students, especially younger children, can be greatly influenced by such education and then form their own opinions of living healthier lives. Secondly, the government is supposed to regulate the advertisements of junk food more strictly, reducing the exposure of such unhealthy food. Thirdly, people should keep a balance of diet and exerecise regularly to stay healthy.

In conclusion, a combination of effective measures, increasing the number of sports facilities included, should be taken to improve public health.

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