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[question]Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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Nowadays, the society has witnessed dramatic changes in many aspects, no matter in the economy, culture or the technology. One of the most important inventions in technology--the video game, seems to be an entertainment takes over children's leisure time. Someone thinks that it should be banned due to its waste of time. However, in my opinion, video game can do good to children to some extent, and should be regulated properly rather than inhibited.

There is an old saying " All work no play makes Jack a dull boy", the computer game can give the children a rest from their study burden and take a relief. As we all know, the students all over the world have the same stress with their assignments. According to a survey investigated by a Chinese education institution, nearly 70% children felt struggled about their homework. As a matter of fact, the computer game can be a wise way for the students to escape from their severe reality. They can get win in the game as a hero, instead of being a loser in their grades or competitions. In other words, they gain achievement and relax.

In addition to its function of amusing the players, the computer game let the children find more friends who share the same interest. Under certain circumstances, those experience they got from the visual world could be used in the real life as well. For instance like my brother Tim, who is good at playing a game called Escape, from that game, he gets more friends than off line, and he also learns strategies to defend and attack, which gives him several hints when he entered a debate contest with those friends he met at the game. In the stage, he showed his leadership and communication skills with his partners. They got harmony in them just because of their past experience of fighting together in the video game. As a result, they won that contest just as they obtained a prize in that game.

Above all, there something we must concern, recently, the quality of the computer game varied, some shows the happiness of life and encourage the children to build their love for others. Nevertheless, there are still some video games who advertise on their violence, sex characteristic, which might lead the immature children to their aggressive personality, even crime. In order to prevent this, it is the government that take place, taking actions to establish regulations, improve the requirement for the company and also arrest those who are still making such a thing to harm the children.

In a conclusion, the children need computer game as entertainment and also a platform to build their friendship circle, but its risk beneath should also be highlighted. With the help of the government, the future of video game will be more suitable for those children and lead them to their mental maturity.

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