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发表于 2018-5-13 18:22 |显示全部楼层
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

To some extent, I agree with this argument that universities and colleges should put funding into sports and social activities as much as they do into classes and libraries for several reasons. Firstly, the budget putting into these sports and activities may enhance the influence on society, which makes the school more competitive among the prospective students. Besides, students may pay much more attention to their health and social issues. However, it is also significant that the school should take the priorities into account if the budget is tight. The article will follow the ideas above.

Nowadays, the universities and colleges always their preferences that they are good at some fields. For example, some universities perform better on science and technology, on the contrast, some focus on arts. So when the funding comes up, maybe the universities will put it into the field, which they have more advantages on, in order to maintain their position among other universities. In my opinion, under the tight budget, this kind of decisions also make sounds.

However, it will be more beneficial for the universities to put it into the sports and social activities. If the university improves their sports equipments for example, maybe their athletes can perform better and win the competitions, which can increase the influence in society. Then many high school students, at least who like this sport, will be attracted by this university. So it is important to gain favor with the prospective students, if the university would like to appeal more excellent students in the future.

Moreover, with supporting sports and social activities increasingly, students of the university will become more conscious in health and social issues. It is necessary for them to do regularly sports, which leads them to a healthier life. For instance, a new gym with better environment and exercise equipments may encourage students to exercise more frequently. In addition,  students who will enter the society soon are required to participate more social activities, such as volunteer works. At same time, the school should be responsible for them, so it should provide them with opportunities to attend such activities.

To sum up, the statement I agree with is reasonable if the school budget is considerable. So, universities should balance their budget in different fields. Only when universities take into consideration the sports and social activities seriously, can students develop more comprehensively.

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发表于 2018-5-13 18:25 |显示全部楼层
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另外,如果用GRE 的issue套路写这个,分数会差很多吗??
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求批改,谢谢老师~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
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Caroline Xu 发表于 2018-5-13 18:22
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Caroline Xu 发表于 2018-5-13 18:22
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老师批改结果出来了吗???
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同学您好,您提交的写作练习已由Caroline Xu老师批改,请查看批改结果:
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