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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

When a report, from Chinese Academic of Social Science (CASS), comes into a disorderly community of Peaking city that over 8,000 young population live in the dirty area where no one keep cleaning of surrounding, because of this news, people start to think about whether young people do have enough time to helping their communities, and some people claim that people do have amount of time focusing on their communities. Such assertion, however, is torn to pieces by others. As far as I concerned, it is young people that not have enough time to help the communities.

Initially, people spend a lot of time in the school to finish their ** and task. This can be aptly exemplified the evidence of students of academic performance in Peking University. Peking University, a fantastic place where had been considered one of the most famous school in the world, has cultivated thousand of young students who spending lots time to help them good performance in specific area. It is well-acknowledged that those young people who spend amount time in the school to achieve academic goal and leave less time to stay at home, let alone they will spend time to improve their community. Accordingly, if young people spend time to help their community, they would have performed bad in the assignment.

What’s more, young people not interested in communication, especially when it comes to those people who they may not familiar with. by sharing information with community’s member, take large time to chat. There is no better illustration to prove my point than the story of myself. When I study in the university, one day, my neighborhood who just moved to this community asked me helping our community to plant tree. I do not familiar with my new friend and not had knowledge to plant tree. I promised her because of politeness. But, In this case, planting trees not only taken me a lots time to communicate with each other, but also I failed my exam in my final test. In light of myself experience, never can we deny that communication and making friend within the community take large part of time in young people’s life.

Admittedly, in no way, should we ignore the fact that it is reasonable to certain people deem that young people do really pay attention to the community, especially when speaking of those people who lived in ten years ago. Because transportation may not easy in that period, people only have limited space with social contact. In this fashion, by contributing and responding people's action, allow them to establish trust with each other. However, what if transportation is easy? What if our social communication is widely. Compelling though ahead statement may sound, by no means will it present who whole picture on the society that it is only suitable for those people who lived in the past, but fails to attach considerable weight to some other circumstance where people few hold responsibility with community, particularly when it comes to the situation which people spend much time in their road for their own business thing. In this way, people might not pay attention to the surrounding, on the other hand, people think community activity is not necessary in their life. Therefore, it goes without saying that young people limited contribute  love and responsibility to community.

To wrap up, base on previous discussion, it is young people that few have time to help communities. Since it takes related situations into consideration.

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