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Question:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.


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Many people can have an arduous hesitation when they face the dilemma whether to grasp the opportunity to take a secure job or wait until they get a satisfying job. Some people believe that it is better to take the secure job right away when there are opportunities rather than wait for a more satisfying job, which I personally agree with. Taking a secure job right away does have multiple advantages in one’s life.

First and foremost, having a secure job can provide the families with a stable financial environment. If a person decides to give up the opportunity of a secure job and wait, the process of waiting during this time means that the whole family may endure a financial turbulence. Take the famous America pop single Kesha as an example. Before she finally distinguished herself, she was very poor and she has to support her mother and her sister. Instead of doing nothing and waiting for someone else to discover her talent, she signed with a record company and did many trivial jobs like writing song pieces for the celebrities, vocal accompaniment for other singers and etc. All of these attempts made she and her family go through those tough periods. In essence, to support the family is supposed to be the ultimate motivation that one takes a job and only by taking a secure job, he or she can make it.

What's more, taking a secure job right away doesn't mean that it is impossible to take a more satisfying job in the future. By doing something else, you can even prepare yourself with more required abilities and knowledge, and therefore increase the probability that you finally get the job you want in the future. In other words, you don't have to be unemployed until you get a more satisfying job. Before Steve Jobs was employed by the company again as CEO, he tried to do many other things, like establishing a new company to test and design new computers. He accumulated may valuable experience during this period and when he came back, he was able to do something legendary with all these experience he acquired before.

Some people may counter my points by saying that it is really an agony to do something that one actually feels uncomfortable with. Admittedly, people always want to do things that are satisfactory, but life does not always let you do so and still, you have to undergo these tough periods. Sometimes, by doing the things which you do not like but have to do, you can learn how to cope with the tough situations in your life, which is a crucial characteristic of a person.

In summary, taking a secure job right away when having the opportunity benefits a person's life in multiple aspects, such as offering the family a stable environment financially, reserving the future possibility to take another job and making yourself commanding the ability to face tough situations. I believe that taking a secure job right away is actually an optimal choice in these situations with all the reasons above considered.


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