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发表于 2018-5-17 16:44 |显示全部楼层
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题目是 some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed .others ,however ,thinke that zoos are useful for the protection of rare animals .discuss both these views and give your own opinion.


People havedifferent views about whether or not zoos should continue to exit .In myopinion ,the zoos play an important role in conservation of animals ,so it isabsurd to allow encourage the closure of all zoos .
Somepeople argue that the animals  undergo painful suffering as a result ofthe life in zoos ,so these zoos should be banned .There are two main reasons why they support thisviews. Firstly , zoos restrict the freedom of animals they keep .Unlike naturalhabitat where wild animals roam ,swim and fly freely ,those animals in zoos aregenerally locked in cages or confined in narrow room . secondly ,the flockingpeople visiting the zoos disturbs or destroys the life of these animals . Someof them ,for example ,mistake the rubbish thrown by visitors as somethingedible and then they die .
However,others disagree with the idea that zoos always negatively influence theanimals kept by themselves .They believe that it is zoos that ensure the survivalof animals ,endangered species in particular .Although  these rare animals could  have lived in the wild , if they were set free to the nature because of theclosure of zoos, then we would largely unlikely to see them again .It is notonly because there are countless poachers who are keen on hunting or killingrare animals ,but also due to the fact that in order to feed and accommodatethe world's population ,people exploit or destroy every square meter of landwhere animals originally live . In short ,the current natural habitats are hardfor those animals to survive that face extinction .
Personally ,i think zoos should exist all thetime ,because it is of much significance to prevent particular animals fromdanger brought by  cruel poachers and polluted habitats.

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发表于 2018-5-19 20:17 |显示全部楼层
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感谢您的参与,小站写作王牌老师JessicaZhang为您作出如下点评:
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发表于 2018-5-20 23:59 |显示全部楼层
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