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[Charlotte. Cheng老师已改] 6月23日就要考TOEFL了。跪求作文批改(TPO53综合加独立)

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发表于 2018-6-9 21:56 |显示全部楼层
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TPO 53 综合
      
Nowadays, it is trendy among people to talk about the topic of the money management of the government. Some people think it is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve  public transportation, while other parts of people totally stand on the opposite side. These people strongly insist that spending money on public transportation is more valuable than that of Internet access. From my perspective, I agree with the former one, for Internet is more crucial Today and there is no necessarily need to improve public transportation.
      
      
In the first place, Internet access should be improved more than public transportation. At this time, Internet plays a significant role in our life. Everyone should utilize the laptops or mobile phones to connect with friends and families or to work. For example, now I an studying TOEFL and preparing for many tests. Internet help me solve a large amount of problems of my skills of English reading and speaking, the fact that Internet is a really convenient and essential thing to me. As we can see, if the governments do not put the weight on the Internet access, it will cause a lot of problems that bring many inconveniences to our life and work.
      
      
Furthermore, I consider that there is no need for governments to import money in order to improve the public transportation. In the city center, we have taxi, bus, metro and so on. To the countryside, we have our cars and we have the choice to take the high-speed rail. Even if we go abroad, we can take the airplane. For instance, last week my friend Lily went from Hong Kong to Wuhan, China to see me. It is quite a distance but she did not worry about it at all because now there is direct airline from Hong Kong to Wuhan and it only takes two hours. As a result, now the governments have best public transportation and we should worry about it.
      
      
Admittedly, public transportation indeed can be greater. Governments can use some money to add some color to our public transportation and to beautify them. People can feel more relaxed if they sit in a tidy and comfortable environment. However, I still insist that the money of the government should be made use of at a more urgent aspect. Today our Internet access still faces some bugs, such as the connection problems and the speed of the Internet. It will be much more helpful to our life and work instead of the public transportation.
      
      
All in all, my opinion is that the governments have the duty to import money to the Internet access perfection rather than the public transportation. In this way, it is more possible to reinforce the quality of our life and the efficiency of our work
      
      
TPO 53 独立
      
In the lecture, the professor states that three benefits of cigarettes taxes can be challenged, casting doubt on the main idea of the reading passage that the policy of imposing high taxes p cigarettes and other unhealthy products has a number of social benefits.
      
      
To begin with, the professor makes the point that taxes do not necessarily lead to healthy behaviors, which refutes the viewpoint showed in the article that the taxes discourage people from indulging in unhealthy behaviors. The professor emphasizes that some consumers may tend to buy some cheaper cigarettes that have lower qualities if they are forced to pay high taxes, while some other consumers even react to high taxes on unhealthy food. These behaviors will do more harm to people.
      
      
Moreover, the author claims that taxes of this kind are financially fair while the professor views this issue from a different angle. In accordance with the speaker, it seems fair for those indulging in cigarettes, but others argue will not seem so. For example, if a high-earning person and a low-earning person are both addicted to cigarettes or unhealthy food, paying high taxes is a great expenses to the poorer person. Therefore, it is unfair to the low-paying people and it brings much greater burden to them.
      
      
Finally, the professor challenges the writer's expectation again by saying that increasing revenue for the government by the high rate of taxation on cigarettes has downside. On the contrary, the writer insists that taxes significantly increases revenue for the government. In order to demonstrate her perspective, the lecturer provides us with the evidence that millions of dollars of taxes mean a lot to the government and also mean that  policy and law will get loose. For example, the government is unlikely to adopt measures like " DO NOT SMOKE IN THE PARK" or " DO NOT SMOKE IN THE PUBLIC AREAS" and so on because the government do not want to lose these taxes income.
   

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发表于 2018-6-13 15:28 |显示全部楼层
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同学你好,求批改版块同一个帖子只能一天批改一篇作文哦,老师先帮你改综合作文,同学可以另外把独立作文隔天放另一个帖子,老师看到会尽快给你批改的,谢谢同学的配合~
久等了同学,希望同学有所收获,记得点一下问题已解决哦♥
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charlottechengkiss 发表于 2018-6-13 15:28
同学你好,求批改版块同一个帖子只能一天批改一篇作文哦,老师先帮你改综合作文,同学可以另外把独立作文隔 ...

好的好的太谢谢老师了我一定做到太感动了
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发表于 2018-6-13 18:51 |显示全部楼层
Hi 同学,你提交的写作练习已由小站王牌老师Charlotte老师批改,请查看批改结果:
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charlottechengkiss 发表于 2018-6-13 18:51
Hi 同学,你提交的写作练习已由小站王牌老师Charlotte老师批改,请查看批改结果:
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有帮助有帮助谢谢老师我会好好修改的!
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