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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic:

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.

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      It stands a reason that the students should focus on their core curriculum, which is directly related to their academic performance. However, theaims of education is generally not only about the knowledge of textbook butalso about extensive opportinities from extra-curricular activities. Therefore, I take the view thatstudent should be encouraged to have unpaid community but not be forced to do so.
     One the one hand, students should be inspired to contribute for the society. Joining somesocial activities is a good way to teach them to help others and put their theory to practice. For example, In class,they have been educated some content, just like the well-known truth thatpeople should respect and help elders. However, without experience,they would not know the satisfactions or importance. The effect of educationwhich leads them to offer assistance to others would be more comprehensiveafter they have done it. These programmes can also bring delight to the peoplewho received the help.
     On the other hand. The programmeswhich make students get involved in unpaid community service could also letthem meet different walks of people. In this case, variety of characteristics needto be dealed with and they can accumulate the experience about communicatingwith multiplicity of people. Consequently, it is helpful for them to get intowork and establish connection with others in the future.
     However, cosidering students’ academic pressureand time planning, such programms should not be listed in compulsory part.
     In conclusion, it is an inescapable fact that it is reasonablefor high school students to spend some time in taking part in unpaid communityservice is both conductive to students themselves and society.




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