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Question:<p>Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?</p><p>If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.</p><p>Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.</p>When young graduates are eagerly applying for jobs, it is debatable whether they should get a secure job as soon as it   appears or wait for a more desirable one despite it is risky and obviously takes time. As far as I am concered, I would undoubtedly wait until a satisfying job shows up.

To begin with, a comparatively prominent job is often connected with handsome salary. To be specific, if we are thirsty for a job that provides me with comfortable materialistic conditions, I would deffinitely wait for a job that enables me to become a responsible bread-earner. To the contrary, a secure job can be easily find but offers less inviting wage. Therefore, to accumulate enough wealth before retirement as a mean to ensure a more relaxed elderly life, it is absolutely reasonable to wait for a satisfying job.

Futhermore, human\\\'s potentials would only be stimulated when they put all their stamina passionately to the job that helps them to achieve personal value. In fact, my uncle John is a graduate majored in Statistics who engages in environment protection and conservation. Because he heatily loves our vulnerable environment, he devotes himself to it by strictly supervising the leagality of carbon emission of factories as a governmental agency. When one is dedicated to a job he is intereted in, it is observed that he will contributes more enthusiatically.

Granted, secure job can always support me with stabilty, implying a low risk to be umempolyed. Nonetheless, with a job that is highly mobilized meaning a opportunity to realize a more attrative status as well as handsome salary, I would be, to greater extent, motivated to work harder. That is because if one believes a job is promising and possibly provides with inviting briliant future, he tends to be optimisstic and,inadvertently, enhances his working capabilties. Advanced efficency is therefore achieved.

In a  nut shell, based on the reason that waiting for a more inviting job can provides higher income, pronounced personal contribution and enhanced efficiency, I unquestion


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