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Some people believe theaim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs.  Othersbelieve there are much wider benefits of university education for bothindividuals and society.
Discuss both views and give your opinion
When they talk about university education, generally people face thedilemma of whether graduates only benefit from getting better jobs or it can bemore beneficial for both students and society to a great extent. While it is agood thing for students who have access tostart earning money, I would argue that there are much wider benefits for bothindividuals and society.
The view of university education is to help just students get better jobsis quite reasonable for several reasons. With the current global economicdownturn, many colleges and universities have increasingly put the employmentrate of graduates in the first place, for example ,the establishment of avariety of cooperative relations between universities and many employers tomake them look like the talents factory.
On the other hand ,I believe that students and society can benefit muchmore from university education. Firstly, students make a lot of friends even aboyfriend or girlfriend. For example ,it is impossible to communicate withsorts of students who come from other cultural background without beinginvolved in university education. Secondly, some of those students have thechance to be awarded their PhD .In terms of their knowledge related to theirchosen profession, they are more likely to be experts in the field, after a fewyears research under the guidance of their professors. Thirdly hotels,restaurants and other services for university students are likely upswinging accompaniedby rising university enrollment rate.
For the reasons mentioned  above ,it seems to me that both students andsociety benefit a great deal. (2018.6.10)


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