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Some people believe theaim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs.  Othersbelieve there are much wider benefits of university education for bothindividuals and society.
Discuss both views and give your opinion
These days, more and more peopleare making the choice to go to university.  While some people are of theopinion that the only purpose of a university education is to improve jobprospects, others think that society and the individual benefit in much broaderways.
It is certainly true that one of the mainaims of university is to secure a better job.  To begin, themajority of people want to improve their future career prospects. Attending university is one of the best ways to do this as it increases yourmarketable skills and your attractiveness to potential employers.  For example, in Europe,further education is very expensive for many people, so most would not considerit if it would not provide them with a more secure future and a higher standardof living.  Also, universities have their reputation to consider.  Theydefinitely want to ensure that their students are going to get the best jobs asthis will affect future funding and university applications.
However, there are otherbenefits for individuals and society.  Firstly, theindependence of living away from home is a benefit because it helps thestudents develop better social skills and improve as a person.  Manystudents, for instance, will have to leave their families, live in halls of residenceand meet new friends.  As a result, their maturity and confidencewill grow enabling them to live more fulfilling lives.  Secondly, societywill gain from the contribution that the graduates can make to theeconomy.  We are living in a very competitive world, so countries,especially developing countries, need educated people in order to compete andprosper.
To conclude, I believe that although a main aim of universityeducation is to get the best job, there are clearly further benefits.  Ifwe continue to promote and encourage university attendance, it will lead to abetter future for everyone.

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