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Some think that children should start school as early as possible, while others believe that they should start school at the age of seven. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowdays, people have different views on children's school age. Some believe the early the better, while others believe seven should be the proper age. I will discuss both views in my essay.

If children start school as early as they can, then they can graduate in a younger age and prepare them for employment earlier, which might be an advantage for them in a highly competetive job market.  After all, in most cases, if two candidates with the same qulification, the employers prefer the younger one. Also, students graduate earlier can work earlier, which eases the labor shortage in society nowadays.  However, if children go to school too early, they maybe too young to understand the subjects and lack of self-control as well.

Children at seven are usually proper to go to school, both on intellect and mental. 7-year-old children have enough intellect to learn the subjects. Compared with those under seven, they often have better thinking and learning skills to gain a better understanding of subjects. Also, 7-year-old children have strong enough metal to develop self-dispcipline. Compared with those under seven, they often control themselves better at class and perform better at school.

In conclusion, children start school earlier might have some advantages in job market, while children start school at seven can have a better academic performance as well as behaviour performance. In my opinion, children should start school at seven in order to adapt in school better.

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