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How to face the depression in economy is a major challenge for governments.In such situation,they are supposed to make full use of their shrank funds to assist people affected by the crisis.They are forced to cut down funding for certain   fields,education,for example.Many believe that education or health care is no longer as crucial as reducing the unemployment rate.I,however,disagree with those people.I think the authority should spend less to support for the unemployed.


Education is closely relevant to a country's future. Education of high quality can equip us with indispensable knowledge and skills to succeed in making the nation better.If the government pay less attention to education along with providing less funding,equipments will not be renewed,more experienced and renowned professors will not be employed and poverty-stricken students will not receive subsidies as well.In other words,the next generation may be to deficient in necessary capability to lead the nation to go out of the darkness and thrive.Frankly speaking,these people might even bring the country another crisis in the foreseeable future. For this sake, it is unwise to reduce funds for education.

Also,a healthy body is essential for everyone. Nobody can continue working when he/she is ill. I can serve as a good example here.Once I feel a bit sick and have a bad cough,I find it extremely hard to work on my paper. There is only one thing I can do under such circumstances:to go to sleep. Similarly,what if all the individuals in the nation fall ill?It is unimaginable what the situation will be when there are few healthy people who can work as normal. Everything in the nation will be in the state of chaos.Thus it is one of the government's obligation to provide sufficient health care for its citizens to ensure their health,even though it is in recession.

On the other hand, it is merely a temporary policy to reduce funding to assist the unemployed and it will not lead to situations that are far beyond control.In fact, this measure will lower the quality of life to some extent.Since everybody will receive necessary health care and high level education as everyone used to, no one will be struck down by serious illness and the nation will soon go through the dark days which is one of the things everyone applauds.

All in all,when an economic crisis confronts the government,the best way to cope with it is to reduce funds for the unemployed rather than education and health care.









               

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In the busy and crowded world, we should not expect people to be polite to others.
Admittedly, never in history did people lead a so busy and crowded life as they do nowadays. It is apparent that anxiety, stress and nervousness have been widely spreading in society and exerting adverse impact on people's words and deeds. However, as far as I am concerned, every citizen ought to behave politely towards others in contemporary society. My position will be elaborated on the following ground.【开篇不错,观点明确】
First and foremost, establishing excellent personal images is one of the outcomes of being polite. It is widely acknowledged that it is people, who behave in a gentle manner and show respect for others that are loved and honored by the public. Take Jane, my friend, as example. She waves hello to residents in her community with a sweet smile on her face whenever encountering them. In return, her neighborhoods are impressed by her politeness and praise her good breeding. Hence, I reckon the significance of politeness can never be overstated.【最后一句范围最好缩小回你的分论点——塑造个人形象】
Furthermore, being polite to others can generate friendship【言简意赅,论点概括不错】. As is stated by a celebrated socialist from Stanford University, people usually fail to sense warmth in modern society, prominently resulting from their mutual impoliteness. In contrast, when they behave politely, for instance, being punctual and shaking hands with others sincerely, chances are that they get along well with each other in a cordial atmosphere. The business conference hold last week is a case in point. The host extended warm welcome to every attendance upon his/her arrival, making everyone feel respected, thus being willing to work out amicable settlement and make friends with other participants. Now that politeness counts in developing friendship how can we overlook it?
In addition, it is showing politeness that can contribute to construction of harmonious society.【分论点由小及大,很好】 It is revealed in a recent investigation conducted by National Statistic Bureau of China (NSBC) that approximately 90% of citizens complain of disappointing indifference and unnecessary arguments in society, and attribute it to people’s impolite manners.  For instance, there are a handful of people who always jump a queue, turning a blind eye to people lining up. Cases similar to this are quite annoying. What’s worse, they can trigger quarrels or even fights occasionally. As a consequence, to establish a more harmonious society, we are supposed to place more emphasis on politeness.【这一段的论述过多在讲负面例子,没有突出礼貌对文明社会建设的作用】
In conclusion, taking all these factors into account, since politeness fills a preeminently dominant role in building up positive personal images, enhancing friendship as well as construction of harmonious society, I am convinced that being polite to each other is indispensable in busy and crowded world.
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